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No work evident.
G:
I am working towards a grade: C-
To improve my mind map work I need to C+/B- List critical elements Form, Content, Context, Process, Mood that demonstrates in depth research. Added a theme you are interested in developing further in your project. Be specific here. Used a wide variety of notes to explore your idea
Feedback 2
Teacher Feedback: AO1 Marks: 0/20 Working towards a grade: U Date: 22nd September
Task: Critical Analysis
Www: You have described some contextual facts, but where is the critical analysis?
Ebi: No work can be found on your Weebly site. Use this link to support this task. Critical analysis sheet is at the bottom. http://sblartonline.weebly.com/critical-analysis.html
Student response: Make any written corrections in green text please. For example;
What I did was complete my critical analyse.
Each Assessment Objective Roughly equals: A =18 B =15 C=12 D=10 E=8 F=5 G=4
Feedback 3
WWW: good planning for photos (mindmap) and drafts of the midmaps.
EBI:edit each photo and do critiques
WWW: Nicely layed out website with lots of images and ideas.
EBI: Edited each photo indivually and uploaded them, add homework onto the site.
Feedback 4
Well done lad. I really like the way you have taken this of Etienne's and turned into something very different but clearly relates to the work. The symmetry in your latter work works really well and should be something you could focus on. You need to find a second photographer and start experimenting. You can then combine the two to create a final piece.
I will act on this by choosing a second photographer and combining them into one piece of art that is my own. I am going to find a photographer that specialises in colour and then my final piece will be an image of movement with colour.
Unit 2 Feedback 1
WWW: You have did really well in talking about the content and context as you have explained in detail what is going on and how he has managed to get there. I think you are working towards a grade B as you have gone into some detail.
EBI: You look into the mood of the photo and how it makes you feel also go into more detail of the process behind the camera and how he has taken the picture and make connections between the context.
Feedback 2
WWW: You have started looking into the critical analysis and have made a clear connection between the photographer and your work both using smoke.
EBI : You edited your images and made sure that the smoke is in focus, try getting closer to the steam as well so you can see it more clearly.
Www: The smoke experiment was a good idea and linked in well with your first photographer. I also like the boiling one with steam, which looks like smoke. Ebi: What happened to the other images of your first smoke experiment? The issue with this shoot was lack of light and the camera was not focused on the smoke. Perhaps put your hand where the smoke will be, focus it and then light the match. Perhaps also with the boiling water shoot you could use different color paper to use as backdrops? Keep trying Harrison. Homework??????
I will act on this in school by using a colored back drop when using the boiling water in the kettle. The homework was unable to be uploaded to my website for no apparent reason. I will buy a USB and put those images onto the USB and bring it in school to upload my second photo shoot. I cant have a vape in school so my main photo shoots will have to be outside of school, but i can use the steam from boiling water, this is not as good when using a vape but it will have to do in school.
Feedback 3
Teacher Feedback AO2: Experiments March 2017 Grade: E
Www: Harrison, I love your enthusiasm when you talk about your work in class. You have shown some interesting experiments with smoke and adding colour to this.
Ebi: You need far more experiments with the smoke techniques, as discussed you could look at controlling the smoke and look more into using light and smoke in a variety of different environments. You can do this by doing 3 different locations when you are able to.
Student response.
I am going to be doing and uploading lots of different techniques with smoke onto my website. I will also be using light in various ways to give my image its best look. I am having issues with uploading my images onto my website, also my friend that helps me with the photoshoots isnt always free so it is hard for me to find a time where i can do a photoshoot and for it to be successful.
No work evident.
G:
- Added the theme in the middle of mind map and extended the first Photographers name with some words on the theme.
- Added at least a couple of words to each critical element title Form, Content, Context, Process that demonstrates some basic research.
- Added a couple of ideas based on visual elements only.
- Listed critical elements Form, Content, Context, Process, Mood that demonstrates in depth research.
- Added a theme you are interested in developing further in your project. Be specific here. Used a wide variety of notes to explore your idea
- Linked in ideas from critical research other than the obvious processes. Looked at content for example.
I am working towards a grade: C-
To improve my mind map work I need to C+/B- List critical elements Form, Content, Context, Process, Mood that demonstrates in depth research. Added a theme you are interested in developing further in your project. Be specific here. Used a wide variety of notes to explore your idea
Feedback 2
Teacher Feedback: AO1 Marks: 0/20 Working towards a grade: U Date: 22nd September
Task: Critical Analysis
Www: You have described some contextual facts, but where is the critical analysis?
Ebi: No work can be found on your Weebly site. Use this link to support this task. Critical analysis sheet is at the bottom. http://sblartonline.weebly.com/critical-analysis.html
Student response: Make any written corrections in green text please. For example;
What I did was complete my critical analyse.
Each Assessment Objective Roughly equals: A =18 B =15 C=12 D=10 E=8 F=5 G=4
Feedback 3
WWW: good planning for photos (mindmap) and drafts of the midmaps.
EBI:edit each photo and do critiques
WWW: Nicely layed out website with lots of images and ideas.
EBI: Edited each photo indivually and uploaded them, add homework onto the site.
Feedback 4
Well done lad. I really like the way you have taken this of Etienne's and turned into something very different but clearly relates to the work. The symmetry in your latter work works really well and should be something you could focus on. You need to find a second photographer and start experimenting. You can then combine the two to create a final piece.
I will act on this by choosing a second photographer and combining them into one piece of art that is my own. I am going to find a photographer that specialises in colour and then my final piece will be an image of movement with colour.
Unit 2 Feedback 1
WWW: You have did really well in talking about the content and context as you have explained in detail what is going on and how he has managed to get there. I think you are working towards a grade B as you have gone into some detail.
EBI: You look into the mood of the photo and how it makes you feel also go into more detail of the process behind the camera and how he has taken the picture and make connections between the context.
Feedback 2
WWW: You have started looking into the critical analysis and have made a clear connection between the photographer and your work both using smoke.
EBI : You edited your images and made sure that the smoke is in focus, try getting closer to the steam as well so you can see it more clearly.
Www: The smoke experiment was a good idea and linked in well with your first photographer. I also like the boiling one with steam, which looks like smoke. Ebi: What happened to the other images of your first smoke experiment? The issue with this shoot was lack of light and the camera was not focused on the smoke. Perhaps put your hand where the smoke will be, focus it and then light the match. Perhaps also with the boiling water shoot you could use different color paper to use as backdrops? Keep trying Harrison. Homework??????
I will act on this in school by using a colored back drop when using the boiling water in the kettle. The homework was unable to be uploaded to my website for no apparent reason. I will buy a USB and put those images onto the USB and bring it in school to upload my second photo shoot. I cant have a vape in school so my main photo shoots will have to be outside of school, but i can use the steam from boiling water, this is not as good when using a vape but it will have to do in school.
Feedback 3
Teacher Feedback AO2: Experiments March 2017 Grade: E
Www: Harrison, I love your enthusiasm when you talk about your work in class. You have shown some interesting experiments with smoke and adding colour to this.
Ebi: You need far more experiments with the smoke techniques, as discussed you could look at controlling the smoke and look more into using light and smoke in a variety of different environments. You can do this by doing 3 different locations when you are able to.
Student response.
I am going to be doing and uploading lots of different techniques with smoke onto my website. I will also be using light in various ways to give my image its best look. I am having issues with uploading my images onto my website, also my friend that helps me with the photoshoots isnt always free so it is hard for me to find a time where i can do a photoshoot and for it to be successful.